A Short Story
© 2020 by Larry F. Sommers
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MAMA KEPT THE GUN MY FATHER USED TO END HIS LIFE, which is how it came to be in the pocket of my ratty overcoat twenty years later as I stalked down St. Paul Avenue with murder in my heart.
It was a Smith & Wesson .38-caliber Police Special, a six-shot revolver made of blued steel. It took years for Mama to part with the simplest of Dad’s personal effects—clothes, underwear, socks, watch, cufflinks. She never did get rid of the gun.
She kept it hidden in a box on her closet shelf, above the limp, dispirited dresses. At age twelve, I snooped all over the house. I fancied I knew all Mama’s secrets. Often when she was still at work, I climbed up on a chair, lifted down the Thom McCann shoe box, removed its lid, and stared at the blue revolver. It had its special place, like a treasured heirloom, kept safe to be handed down to the next generation. Sometimes I played with the bullets in the little box beside the gun. I always put things back before Mama got home.
Lucille, my older sister, had left to make her own way in the world. She had put all the distance she could between herself and us. I can’t say I blame her.
All that was long behind me on this cold Christmas Eve. I was now the star of my own drama.
“I’m leaving,” Angie had announced in the small kitchen of our crappy little upstairs flat.
“Where you going?” I asked in all innocence. “We need milk or something? I can go.”
“No. I mean I’m leaving you, Eddie. For good.”
“What! Leaving me?” Then, a moment later, “Who is it?”
She picked up her tiny overnight case from under the kitchen table. “None of your business. But if you must know, it’s Sal.” I had not even noticed the overnight case.
“Sal the saloonkeeper? You’re dumping me for him? What’s he got over me?” I grew hot under the collar, shouted right in her face.
She stood there, bold as brass. Then her eyes softened. “I’m carrying Sal’s child.”
At that I exploded.
I’m not sure what all I said. I am sure I did not lay a hand on her.
But she laid me out with words, just as surely as David slew Goliath with a stone.
“A woman wants children, Eddie. I got tired of waiting. Sal gave me what I wanted. You wouldn’t, or couldn’t.”
She walked out with that tiny case, leaving me alone with Bathsheba, the snappy little Pomeranian bitch I had given her last Christmas. I never wanted a dog. But better a dog than a little hotheaded boy.
I yelled down the hall. “What about the mutt? Don’t you want her?”
The empty hallway bounced my voice back at me.
The nerve. The sheer, unmitigated gall. She can’t treat me that way.
I pounded my fists on the wall until the little red fur-ball started yapping. I walked circles on the floor. Then I remembered.
I went to the bedroom, pulled out my bottom drawer, and lifted out the gun, which had become mine when Mom died. Funny thing, I never could bring myself to get rid of it either.
Those bullets were still in the little box. I loaded the gun, jammed it in the pocket of my overcoat, and went out.
Angie had left me for Salvatore Balistreri, the tavern-keeper. Now I was gunning for him. Somehow I always knew it would come to this. Dad was a hothead and I was a hothead. Like father, like son.
My mind was clear as I sloshed through the snow to Sal’s place. It had calmed me some to slide the bullets, one by one, into the chambers of the rotating cylinder. I only loaded five, because I’d heard it’s bad luck to carry a gun with a live round under the hammer.
We lived in a run-down section of Milwaukee known as the Third Ward, an old Italian neighborhood. Now, in 1976, they were building highways through it. One of the last holdouts against progress was Balistreri’s bar.
I couldn’t help notice the tavern seemed festive. Evergreen boughs draped its lighted front. The door had a fresh coat of red paint. You could call it fire engine red or church door red. Same difference.
I pushed in through wall-to-wall celebrants, who all had the advantage of me by several drinks. The swirl of tobacco smoke and alcohol fumes was baptized by the smell of garlic as Sal’s sister Loretta danced by with a tray of hot pizza. Merry-makers toasted a small Christmas tree that sat on one end of the bar, hung with lights, tinsel, and small pictures of Italian saints.
All this warmth around me, but I was an icicle.
Angie, on a stool at the bar, turned her face away when she saw me. Never mind that.
I rounded the end of the bar to confront Sal. “Who the hell you think you are, loverboy? Who are you, Casanova?”
I went to grab his collar. He fended me off. He was half a head taller than me, maybe a couple years older. His dark face turned darker, as if he knew to be ashamed of himself.
He softly placed a white towel on the little shelf behind the bar. “Let’s have this talk outside.”
He led the way out through the back door, into the alley behind the bar.
I jumped him. “You’ve been screwing my wife!”
He threw me back off and held up his hands. “Look at yourself, Eddie. No wonder she don’t want you.”
He glowered. “What kind of man is it, won’t give a girl a little bambino?”
My hand dug for the gun. My finger found the trigger guard.
“Angie don’t wanna see you any more. Neither do I. Beat it.” He turned and walked back into the bar as I pulled the gun out of my pocket.
I raised it to fire just as the door closed.
Standing there, a bewildered baboon, I couldn’t believe it. I had come on purpose to kill him and frittered it away in talk.
What if I went back in right now and shot him dead behind the bar, right in front of Angie?
But I should go in the front way, like a man. I ran down the alley, turned the corner, and walked half a block to St. Paul.
I slogged down the street, went on past the front door of Balistreri’s, and found myself on the southbound ramp of the new Hoan Bridge. The city fathers wouldn’t connect the freeway that led to it, so people called it the Bridge to Nowhere. How fitting.
There I was, trudging up the long slope of the bridge, a pedestrian in the middle of an interstate highway with no cars on it. I saw a yellow flicker far away—maybe a hobo camp on the south shore under the south end of the bridge.
It was a long walk, like a mile, to the top of the bridge. But having started, I kept on to the highest point, dead over the Milwaukee River where it entered Lake Michigan.
I looked down at the black water, a hundred and twenty feet below me. If the fall didn’t kill me, I’d perish soon after in the frigid water. The river would push me out into the lake and I’d never be found.
I felt the weight of the gun in my pocket. A surer way. Quicker. Less terrifying.
“Say, buddy, I hate to bother you . . . .”
“Huh?” I turned away from the rail. A man stood there.
A hairy old face, a Packers stocking cap, a bundle of heavy layers. The top layer was fur, like an old-time raccoon coat. “I wouldn’t bother you. It’s just, the pup ain’t et in a coupla days.” A ragged white snout poked out the top of his coat. A dog, some kind of terrier, with a big black nose and dark, hungry eyes.
“You carry it in your coat?”
“He can run and jump all right, but it’s mighty cold tonight.”
How had I missed this bum’s approach? The moonlight showed his tracks in the snow, coming up from the south end of the bridge.
“You walked all this way to ask for a handout?”
“If you could just spare a coupla bucks, we could have us a meal.”
The dog made no comment, just stared at me.
I gave the old tramp all the cash in my wallet. “Here, you might as well have it.”
His face lit up. “Thank you kindly.” He tucked the bills inside his coat. “God bless you, sir.” He turned and hiked back the way he had come, stepping in his own footprints.
I pulled out the gun. Now was the time.
The bullets were old, from Dad’s era. I wondered if they would still shoot. Perhaps I should fire a test round.
I had never fired a handgun, so I held it in both hands, afraid of the kick. I aimed down at the river, squeezed the trigger. BAM!
Yes, the bullets were good. And no, the kick wasn’t too bad.
I looked around, wondered if the gunshot would bring the old panhandler back. But he was gone, footprints and all. Already back at his campfire?
Imagine a guy like that owning a dog. At least the mutt would get a bite to eat, if the old guy could find a store open around here this time of night. I thought of Bathsheba, back at the apartment. I imagined her doggy impatience and felt a twinge of guilt.
Maybe that first shot was a fluke, the one good bullet in the box. I squeezed off another shot into the river. BAM! That settled that.
Three rounds left. I only needed one of them to work.
Bathsheba could fend for herself. Maybe somebody would find her.
Here I was, the hothead son of a hothead father. In my hand is the gun he used on himself. I have it because my mother saved it for me. A family tradition.
A proper end to a crappy life. I couldn’t even make my marriage last. My wife dumped me because I couldn’t face the thought of another kid like me. Then that Dago bartender moved in on her, so she used him to get what she wanted.
What a sap I am, to kill myself for Sal Balistreri.
I pointed the gun at the river. BAM! Take that, Sal. BAM! There’s one for you, Angie.
I heard a whimper. Nobody closer to me than a mile.
There had been no sound, but it had sounded like Bathsheba.
If I had been Dad, I would have plugged big Sal back at the bar, and then plugged Angie for good measure, and then shot myself on the spot.
But I’m not Dad.
Bathsheba whines to be fed, to be taken outside. Nasty little bitch, none of this is her fault.
I fired the last shot into the river.
I squeezed the trigger once more, to be sure. Click.
The shakes came over me. I opened my hand, let the gun go. It fell one hundred and twenty feet into the dark water. The night was so still I could hear the splash.
I turned and stomped back in my own footprints, headed for home. Warm little Bathsheba needed me.
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